Thistledownflight

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Thistledownflight

by Elsa von Freytag-Loringhoven

Original Source

The Baroness' poems and papers are contained in the Archives and Manuscripts Department at the University of Maryland Libraries. Complete papers cover the period from 1917-1933 and consist of manuscripts, drafts, notes, correspondence, drawings and photographs.

Textual transcription and analysis of the seven poems encoded here were undertaken in Fall 2003 by graduate students in William H. Sherman's English 601 class, "Literary Research and Critical Contexts."

Text editing of "Thistledownflight" was performed by Helen Lucille DeVinney.

Witness List

  • Witness a1: Thitledownflight: Version 1 - Most-Finished version
  • Witness a2: Thistledownflight: Version 2 - Typed
  • Witness a3: Thistledownflight: Version 3
  • Witness a4: Thistledownflight: Version 3 - Rewritten Second Half
  • Witness a5: Ghinga: Version 4 - Images Only
  • Witness a6: Ginga: Version 5 - The Early Draft of Thistledownflight

Textual Notes

There are five versions of "Thistledownflight," presented here in the following order: four handwritten versions and one typewritten version (Version 2) by the Baroness (in the order of the "most-finished" version to the earliest draft, as determined by the editor). Since Baroness rewrtoe the sencond half of the version 3 and it to the version 3, the second half version is separately encoded as Witness a4. The version 4 (Witness 5) is available only as the images. Titles of the latest three versions are "Thistledownflight". "Ginga" is used as titles for the earlier two versions. The poem is unpublished.
The following is an excerpt from Helen Lucille DeVinney's transcription rationale:

The handwriting is her typical use of majuscule letters, and the letters themselves are slightly larger than her standard print. It is presented as a visual poem; the Baroness has taken pains to add her own artistic decorations to the paper. Her use of the page is sparse, and the layout of the words themselves is artistic. The placement of the line groupings is irregular, and, in the case of the final word “Thistledownflight,” she arranges the word itself in an artistic way. Interestingly, the poem is unsigned, as are each of the subsequent drafts.

In some cases her handwriting seems to be slightly different in the corrections, but this alone is not enough to determine that the revisions occurred at another time. Her arrangement suggests that the poem was beginning to take shape: certain words or lines are clearly grouped and begin to suggest the arrangement of 2r/2v [Version 2]. She clearly leaves room for possibility....In 4r/4v [Version 4] we see the appearance of the later title "Thistle down flight," which are also the last lines of the poem. This version seems to precede 3r/3v [Version 3]; in 3r/3v we see the adoption of the title "Thistledownflight," as well as the arrangement and corrections of some of her revisions in 4r/4v.


Read Helen Lucille DeVinney's essay "Thistledownflight."

Electronic Edition Information:

Responsibility Statement:
  • Encoded by Kenichiro Shimada and Helen Lucille DeVinney
Publication Details:

Published by Special Collections, University of Maryland Libraries.

University of Maryland, College Park, MD 20742 2004

Researchers can gain access to the Papers of Elsa von Freytag-Loringhoven in the Maryland Room, Hornbake Library, University of Maryland Libraries, College Park, MD 20742

"Thistiledownflight" manuscripts located in Series III, Box four, Folder 11; microfiche id numbers 5/920-5/927, 5/969.

Special Collections at the University of Maryland provides more information about the microfilm edition of the papers.

Images and manuscripts drafts of this poem may not be reproduced or downloaded and used on another site without the explicit permission of UMD Archives. They may not be reproduced or downloaded and used on another site without the explicit permission of UMD Archives. Though the intellectual property of Elsa von Freytag-Loringhoven is in the public domain, all annotations and editorial commentary are copyrighted.

Encoding Principles

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Thistle down flight
Thistle down flight-Second half of Version 3
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Note: Baroness rewrote the second half (second column) of Version 3. This part is separately encoded in order to enjoy advantages of the Versioning Machine.
GINGA
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Note: Version4 (Witness5) was not encoded since there are too many revisions (in this version) to apply parallel segmentation.
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GHINGHA
(DJUNA)
GINGA
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I
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MUSTI
TREMBLE
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DO
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NOT
6
MAY NOT
LAUGH
!
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BORN
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MOTHER
FINE
FLOWER
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FLOWER
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BY
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ORCHID
SPPECKLED DARK-LIGHT
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SPECKLED
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DARK
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LIGHT
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SHE
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WEPT
AT MORNNIGHT SUMPTUOUSMEAGER
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AT
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NIGHT
!
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CURSED
CURSING
PROPER SNARING SNARE OF AMPLELIFE'S PURSE
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TAUT
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SNARE
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OF
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DULLARD'S
26
AMPLE
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PURSE
––
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AT
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SPIRITLEDGE
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BRIGHT
YOUTH
OF HERS
32
OF
TORN     SPIRIT BORN
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HER'S
AT AGE OF AT WSDOM WORN EDGE
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BRIGHT
––
BRIGHT     WORN
SOUL FORLORN
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AT
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AT
WISDOMEDGE
WISDOM EDGE
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TORN
!
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GHINGA
GINGA
 (DJUNA)
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FROM
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HER'S
HERSS
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PATH
COURSE BED
CURVE
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PATH
DIVERGED
––
YET
FROM HERS AM I URGED FROM HERS
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WITHIN
I
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HEIR
HERE  HEIR
TO TO WITH
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SHE
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SOB'S
SOBS
QUAKE WEPS
QUAKE
53
TO MUST I QUAKE
ANEW
:
!
   SOBS
FRESH
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VAGRANT
HEIR BULB     VAGRANT
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VAGRANCY FOR
SPILL
!
DOOM
IS IT  IS ITCURSED TOO?
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HASIS     
BEACON
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ISLAND
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BED
BED
TO
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FOR
TO
BEAR
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BEAR
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FOR
SPECKELED
ORCHIDS GLARE
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ORCHIDS
ORHID'S
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GLARE
     DARK—LIGHT
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HAS
FOUND
HAS
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HAS
SITE
SITE
   FINDS FOUND
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IS IT
NOWHERE
!
NxWHERE?RIGHT
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ON EARTH ILL WILL
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Note: There are three rewritten attempts about this part. In the space on the left hand side of the column, there is the rewriting, “SUN WILL EARTH BEARS" ("EARTH" and "BEARS" are crossed out). On the righthad side of the column, there are two revising attempts. One is “SH WE IS ARE NIL ILL" ("WE," "ARE," and "NIL" are crossed out). Another is “SUN WILLED ILL MOTHER RIGHT BIRTH" (This part is actually closed out with the zigzag line). See the image.
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SUN
MOTHER xxGHT
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WILL
NIL!
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ILL !
BIRTH RIGHT
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BUT
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BIRTH
   EARTH
x RIGHT
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BLIGHT
BLIGHT
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THISTLEDOWNFLIGHT
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CHINGHA" FOR "DJUNA"
FOR MOTHER ME
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Thistledownflight
Thistledownflight
Thistle down flight
Thistle down flight-Second half of Version 3
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Note: Baroness rewrote the second half (second column) of Version 3. This part is separately encoded in order to enjoy advantages of the Versioning Machine.
GINGA
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Note: Version4 (Witness5) was not encoded since there are too many revisions (in this version) to apply parallel segmentation.
1
GHINGHA
(DJUNA)
GINGA
2
I
3
MUSTI
TREMBLE
4
DO
5
NOT
6
MAY NOT
LAUGH
!
7
BORN
8
MOTHER
FINE
FLOWER
9
FLOWER
10
BY
11
ORCHID
SPPECKLED DARK-LIGHT
13
SPECKLED
14
DARK
15
LIGHT
17
SHE
18
WEPT
AT MORNNIGHT SUMPTUOUSMEAGER
19
AT
20
NIGHT
!
21
CURSED
CURSING
PROPER SNARING SNARE OF AMPLELIFE'S PURSE
22
TAUT
23
SNARE
24
OF
25
DULLARD'S
26
AMPLE
27
PURSE
––
28
AT
29
SPIRITLEDGE
31
BRIGHT
YOUTH
OF HERS
32
OF
TORN     SPIRIT BORN
33
HER'S
AT AGE OF AT WSDOM WORN EDGE
34
BRIGHT
––
BRIGHT     WORN
SOUL FORLORN
37
AT
WISDOMEDGE
WISDOM EDGE
38
TORN
!
41
GHINGA
GINGA
 (DJUNA)
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FROM
44
HER'S
HERSS
45
PATH
COURSE BED
CURVE
46
PATH
DIVERGED
––
YET
FROM HERS AM I URGED FROM HERS
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WITHIN
I
50
HEIR
HERE  HEIR
TO TO WITH
51
SHE
52
SOB'S
SOBS
QUAKE WEPS
QUAKE
53
TO MUST I QUAKE
ANEW
:
!
   SOBS
FRESH
55
VAGRANT
HEIR BULB     VAGRANT
57
VAGRANCY FOR
SPILL
!
DOOM
IS IT  IS ITCURSED TOO?
61
HASIS     
BEACON
62
ISLAND
63
BED
BED
TO
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FOR
TO
BEAR
65
BEAR
66
FOR
SPECKELED
ORCHIDS GLARE
67
ORCHIDS
ORHID'S
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GLARE
     DARK—LIGHT
75
HAS
FOUND
HAS
76
HAS
SITE
SITE
   FINDS FOUND
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EARTH
NOWHERE
79
IS IT
NOWHERE
!
NxWHERE?RIGHT
p
Physical note: There is a gray oval from this line to the bottom of the page. See the image.
ON EARTH ILL WILL
n
Note: There are three rewritten attempts about this part. In the space on the left hand side of the column, there is the rewriting, “SUN WILL EARTH BEARS" ("EARTH" and "BEARS" are crossed out). On the righthad side of the column, there are two revising attempts. One is “SH WE IS ARE NIL ILL" ("WE," "ARE," and "NIL" are crossed out). Another is “SUN WILLED ILL MOTHER RIGHT BIRTH" (This part is actually closed out with the zigzag line). See the image.
? ON EARTH
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SUN
MOTHER xxGHT
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WILL
NIL!
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ILL !
BIRTH RIGHT
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BUT
NIL
BIRTH
   EARTH
x RIGHT
84
BLIGHT
BLIGHT
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THISTLEDOWNFLIGHT
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Thistledownflight
Thistle down flight
Thistle down flight-Second half of Version 3
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Note: Baroness rewrote the second half (second column) of Version 3. This part is separately encoded in order to enjoy advantages of the Versioning Machine.
GINGA
n
Note: Version4 (Witness5) was not encoded since there are too many revisions (in this version) to apply parallel segmentation.
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GHINGHA
(DJUNA)
GINGA
2
I
3
MUSTI
TREMBLE
4
DO
5
NOT
6
MAY NOT
LAUGH
!
7
BORN
8
MOTHER
FINE
FLOWER
9
FLOWER
10
BY
11
ORCHID
SPPECKLED DARK-LIGHT
13
SPECKLED
14
DARK
15
LIGHT
16
DOOMED
17
SHE
18
WEPT
AT MORNNIGHT SUMPTUOUSMEAGER
19
AT
20
NIGHT
!
21
CURSED
CURSING
PROPER SNARING SNARE OF AMPLELIFE'S PURSE
22
TAUT
23
SNARE
24
OF
25
DULLARD'S
26
AMPLE
27
PURSE
––
28
AT
29
SPIRITLEDGE
30
BRIGHT
31
BRIGHT
YOUTH
OF HERS
32
OF
TORN     SPIRIT BORN
33
HER'S
AT AGE OF AT WSDOM WORN EDGE
34
BRIGHT
––
BRIGHT     WORN
SOUL FORLORN
35
WORN
36
AT
37
AT
WISDOMEDGE
WISDOM EDGE
38
TORN
!
39
BLIGHT
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GHINGA
GINGA
 (DJUNA)
42
WHY
THOUGH
43
FROM
44
HER'S
HERSS
45
PATH
COURSE BED
CURVE
46
PATH
DIVERGED
––
YET
FROM HERS AM I URGED FROM HERS
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AMWHY
n
Note: This paragraph was revised several times. As well as the other parts of the Version 3, all rewritten parts here are organized in a way of “a word in a line.” See the image of Version 3 in order to acquire the actual locations and layouts. In the far left of the first column, there is rewritten paragraph “YET IS SHE URGED D IN HEIR TO QUAKE ANEW VAGRANT FORLORAN SPILL” ("FORLORAN" is crossed out). Next this paragraph, there is another revised paragraph “YET WITHIN HEIR SHE QUAKES ANEW”("YET" is crossed out). Left side of the second column, there are another revisions. “YET IS SHE URGED TO," “QUAKE ANEW IN HEIR,” “TOO VGRANT SPILL.”
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WITHIN
I
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FURGED
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HEIR
HERE  HEIR
TO TO WITH
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SOB'S
SOBS
QUAKE WEPS
QUAKE
53
TO MUST I QUAKE
ANEW
:
!
   SOBS
FRESH
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IS FOR IS FOR
IN
ISHER SPARK WITHINMY HORSE HOUSE YOUNG SHELL
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VAGRANT
HEIR BULB     VAGRANT
56
DOOMED DOOMED
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VAGRANCY FOR
SPILL
!
DOOM
IS IT  IS ITCURSED TOO?
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TOODOOMED      LIGHT
IS THERE NOISLE HOT BEDSTEAD
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BLOOD      VAGRANTHEIRESS
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HAS
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HASIS     
BEACON
62
ISLAND
63
BED
BED
TO
64
FOR
TO
BEAR
66
FOR
SPECKELED
ORCHIDS GLARE
67
ORCHIDS
ORHID'S
68
DARK —
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LIGHT
70
GLARE
     DARK—LIGHT
71
HAS    TO BEAR
DARK DARK
76
HAS
SITE
SITE
   FINDS FOUND
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ON
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EARTH
NOWHERE
79
IS IT
NOWHERE
!
NxWHERE?RIGHT
p
Physical note: There is a gray oval from this line to the bottom of the page. See the image.
ON EARTH ILL WILL
n
Note: There are three rewritten attempts about this part. In the space on the left hand side of the column, there is the rewriting, “SUN WILL EARTH BEARS" ("EARTH" and "BEARS" are crossed out). On the righthad side of the column, there are two revising attempts. One is “SH WE IS ARE NIL ILL" ("WE," "ARE," and "NIL" are crossed out). Another is “SUN WILLED ILL MOTHER RIGHT BIRTH" (This part is actually closed out with the zigzag line). See the image.
? ON EARTH
80
SUN
MOTHER xxGHT
81
WILL
NIL!
83
BUT
NIL
BIRTH
   EARTH
x RIGHT
84
BLIGHT
BLIGHT
85
THISTLEDOWNFLIGHT
!
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THISTLExxWNFLIGHT
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Thistledownflight
Thistledownflight
Thistle down flight
Thistle down flight-Second half of Version 3
n
Note: Baroness rewrote the second half (second column) of Version 3. This part is separately encoded in order to enjoy advantages of the Versioning Machine.
GINGA
n
Note: Version4 (Witness5) was not encoded since there are too many revisions (in this version) to apply parallel segmentation.
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GHINGA
GINGA
 (DJUNA)
42
WHY
THOUGH
43
FROM
44
HER'S
HERSS
45
PATH
COURSE BED
CURVE
46
PATH
DIVERGED
––
YET
FROM HERS AM I URGED FROM HERS
48
WITHIN
I
50
HEIR
HERE  HEIR
TO TO WITH
51
SHE
52
SOB'S
SOBS
QUAKE WEPS
QUAKE
53
TO MUST I QUAKE
ANEW
:
!
   SOBS
FRESH
54
IS FOR IS FOR
IN
ISHER SPARK WITHINMY HORSE HOUSE YOUNG SHELL
55
VAGRANT
HEIR BULB     VAGRANT
57
VAGRANCY FOR
SPILL
!
DOOM
IS IT  IS ITCURSED TOO?
61
HASIS     
BEACON
62
ISLAND
63
BED
BED
TO
66
FOR
SPECKELED
ORCHIDS GLARE
67
ORCHIDS
ORHID'S
70
GLARE
     DARK—LIGHT
71
HAS    TO BEAR
DARK DARK
72
LIGHT LIGHT
73
TO FLEW
74
BEAR
75
HAS
FOUND
HAS
76
HAS
SITE
SITE
   FINDS FOUND
79
IS IT
NOWHERE
!
NxWHERE?RIGHT
p
Physical note: There is a gray oval from this line to the bottom of the page. See the image.
ON EARTH ILL WILL
n
Note: There are three rewritten attempts about this part. In the space on the left hand side of the column, there is the rewriting, “SUN WILL EARTH BEARS" ("EARTH" and "BEARS" are crossed out). On the righthad side of the column, there are two revising attempts. One is “SH WE IS ARE NIL ILL" ("WE," "ARE," and "NIL" are crossed out). Another is “SUN WILLED ILL MOTHER RIGHT BIRTH" (This part is actually closed out with the zigzag line). See the image.
? ON EARTH
82
ILL !
BIRTH RIGHT
83
BUT
NIL
BIRTH
   EARTH
x RIGHT
84
BLIGHT
BLIGHT
85
THISTLEDOWNFLIGHT
!
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Note: The original layout is diagonal (up-down-up); see the image.
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n
Note: The original layout is diagonal; see the image.
THISTLExxWNFLIGHT
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Thistledownflight
Thistledownflight
Thistle down flight
Thistle down flight-Second half of Version 3
n
Note: Baroness rewrote the second half (second column) of Version 3. This part is separately encoded in order to enjoy advantages of the Versioning Machine.
GINGA
n
Note: Version4 (Witness5) was not encoded since there are too many revisions (in this version) to apply parallel segmentation.
Facsimile Image Placeholder
Thistledownflight
Thistledownflight
Thistle down flight
Thistle down flight-Second half of Version 3
n
Note: Baroness rewrote the second half (second column) of Version 3. This part is separately encoded in order to enjoy advantages of the Versioning Machine.
GINGA
n
Note: Version4 (Witness5) was not encoded since there are too many revisions (in this version) to apply parallel segmentation.
1
GHINGHA
(DJUNA)
GINGA
3
MUSTI
TREMBLE
6
MAY NOT
LAUGH
!
8
MOTHER
FINE
FLOWER
11
ORCHID
SPPECKLED DARK-LIGHT
18
WEPT
AT MORNNIGHT SUMPTUOUSMEAGER
21
CURSED
CURSING
PROPER SNARING SNARE OF AMPLELIFE'S PURSE
31
BRIGHT
YOUTH
OF HERS
32
OF
TORN     SPIRIT BORN
33
HER'S
AT AGE OF AT WSDOM WORN EDGE
34
BRIGHT
––
BRIGHT     WORN
SOUL FORLORN
37
AT
WISDOMEDGE
WISDOM EDGE
40
WHY
41
GHINGA
GINGA
 (DJUNA)
46
PATH
DIVERGED
––
YET
FROM HERS AM I URGED FROM HERS
53
TO MUST I QUAKE
ANEW
:
!
   SOBS
FRESH
54
IS FOR IS FOR
IN
ISHER SPARK WITHINMY HORSE HOUSE YOUNG SHELL
57
VAGRANCY FOR
SPILL
!
DOOM
IS IT  IS ITCURSED TOO?
58
TOODOOMED      LIGHT
IS THERE NOISLE HOT BEDSTEAD
61
HASIS     
BEACON
66
FOR
SPECKELED
ORCHIDS GLARE
79
IS IT
NOWHERE
!
NxWHERE?RIGHT
p
Physical note: There is a gray oval from this line to the bottom of the page. See the image.
ON EARTH ILL WILL
n
Note: There are three rewritten attempts about this part. In the space on the left hand side of the column, there is the rewriting, “SUN WILL EARTH BEARS" ("EARTH" and "BEARS" are crossed out). On the righthad side of the column, there are two revising attempts. One is “SH WE IS ARE NIL ILL" ("WE," "ARE," and "NIL" are crossed out). Another is “SUN WILLED ILL MOTHER RIGHT BIRTH" (This part is actually closed out with the zigzag line). See the image.
? ON EARTH
83
BUT
NIL
BIRTH
   EARTH
x RIGHT
84
BLIGHT
BLIGHT
86
CHINGHA" FOR "DJUNA"
FOR MOTHER ME
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OUR NAME —
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GINGA — BROTHER
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FLAME?
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Note: This paragraph was revised several times. As well as the other parts of the Version 3, all rewritten parts here are organized in a way of “a word in a line.” See the image of Version 3 in order to acquire the actual locations and layouts. In the far left of the first column, there is rewritten paragraph “YET IS SHE URGED D IN HEIR TO QUAKE ANEW VAGRANT FORLORAN SPILL” ("FORLORAN" is crossed out). Next this paragraph, there is another revised paragraph “YET WITHIN HEIR SHE QUAKES ANEW”("YET" is crossed out). Left side of the second column, there are another revisions. “YET IS SHE URGED TO," “QUAKE ANEW IN HEIR,” “TOO VGRANT SPILL.”
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Line number 79
Note: There are three rewritten attempts about this part. In the space on the left hand side of the column, there is the rewriting, “SUN WILL EARTH BEARS" ("EARTH" and "BEARS" are crossed out). On the righthad side of the column, there are two revising attempts. One is “SH WE IS ARE NIL ILL" ("WE," "ARE," and "NIL" are crossed out). Another is “SUN WILLED ILL MOTHER RIGHT BIRTH" (This part is actually closed out with the zigzag line). See the image.
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